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In my opinion anyway the last verse goes quite nicely with the others!

A couple thoughts on the poetry angle; (Feel free to ignore them if they clash with your poetic preferences :)

-In verse 1 two lines end with the same word: believers.

– “the Comforter from Christ rained down” this line sounds a little odd to my ear. As does “who had been His believers” ( Again this is just my ear so if your ear likes it just ignore my remarks.)

Verse 3 “His spirit quickens everything” seems like it sound a bit awkward.