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Discussion
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Please share any ideas or critiques, does the last verse tie in well enough to the other two?
On Pentecost
1 On Pentecost God’s Spirit fell,
Like fire on the believers,
And they went forth Christ’s words to tell
Who had been its receivers.
The Comforter from Christ rained down,
And they went out the King to crown,
Who had been His believers.
2 They preached and prayed and taught the Word,
They had all things together,
They gladly taught the ones who heard,
By loving one another.
They broke their bread with one accord,
And any who received the Lord,
They counted as a brother.
3 On Carmel God sent fire down,
Elijah’s faith confirming;
While Israel worshiped all around,
From sin and idols turning.
The Lord is God, the Christ is King,
His Spirit quickens everything,
So set our hearts to burning.
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In my opinion anyway the last verse goes quite nicely with the others!
A couple thoughts on the poetry angle; (Feel free to ignore them if they clash with your poetic preferences 🙂
-In verse 1 two lines end with the same word: believers.
– “the Comforter from Christ rained down” this line sounds a little odd to my ear. As does “who had been His believers” ( Again this is just my ear so if your ear likes it just ignore my remarks.)
Verse 3 “His spirit quickens everything” seems like it sound a bit awkward.
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