This has a lovely cadence, Rachel, and I like how you circle back to the word “rejoice.”
In line 5, I’m wondering if you want to have “In Him we life and being have” this would give a compound subject for the verb “have” instead of a compound verb “live and have” with the direct object in front of the second verb. I’m sorry to be all grammatical, but the line just feels awkward. I realize the verse alluded to does use the word “live.” (“In Him, we live and move and have our being.” Both lines could work.
