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July 31, 2022 at 10:43 pm
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Sherri Steiner
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Thanks for those thoughts! Honestly, I wasn’t totally satisfied with the last line of stanza 2 but I wanted to hear thoughts on it before stressing out about finding a new one. I finally rewrote the whole stanza and I’m still trying to decide if it is any better. Here it is.
Lord Jesus Christ, be my heart’s shield.
While knowing You, I cannot fear.
Let life be wild in every field
Or peace prevail; my God is near.
Stanza 3 remains a work in progress; I’m glad for your suggestions there.