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“Let me live this day, for Thee only, Lord.
Let me count earth’s gain only vanity.”
A couple thoughts… One is that using the same word repeatedly is a very effective poetic technic but in this case the repeat use of only does’nt seem to quite be working.
“Let me lose myself for Thine own accord.
Let me give my life, as You have for me.”
On this one the switch between the modern You and the archaic Thy strikes my ear as a bit odd. If I were doing it I think I’d stick with one or the other (Which ever you happen to take a fancy to.) for the entire piece. ( And I agree that accord should probly be switched for a more apt word.)
