I don’t know that I have the expertise to critique this, but my main thoughts are that the melody sounds good and hangs together, but that the harmony sounds a bit muddy in a few places. As in, dissonant without an obvious purpose. That may just be my perception.
In an earlier conversation about this, Wendell Glick had said, “The harmony in this song comes across as a bit of a walk through the last century; ergo, the harmony feels internally incongruent in a few places (mostly the sharped re chords).”
