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I see what you mean about the line you pointed out, but I’m out of suggestions for it…sorry

Maybe change brought “the stuff” to something else… “the gifts” perhaps, but the line may be a little overused

Just a personal opinion… I don’t like lines 7 and 8. Lines 14 and 15 are some of my favorites though.

Instead of “God of gods”… “King of kings”?