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Lynn Martin
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Hi Michelle, great to see you posting here! When you say you’re not sure about “let me,” do you mean that you’re not sure if you should start every line that way?

I like where this is going, and probably the music will make all the difference as to whether this text sings well or not, since it’s not highly bound. However, I did wonder whether there’s a reason for the order of the lines that you have now. The final line seems like it could be switched with the fourth line and it would make a lot of sense. The progression and theme aren’t super clear, although they aren’t particularly problematic, either.