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Lynn Martin

Hi Michelle, great to see you posting here! When you say you’re not sure about “let me,” do you mean that you’re not sure if you should start every line that way?

I like where this is going, and probably the music will make all the difference as to whether this text sings well or not, since it’s not highly bound. However, I did wonder whether there’s a reason for the order of the lines that you have now. The final line seems like it could be switched with the fourth line and it would make a lot of sense. The progression and theme aren’t super clear, although they aren’t particularly problematic, either.