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A couple thoughts…

“Be swallowed in the glory of His cross,”

To my ear the word “swallowed” sounds less than beautifully poetic when coupled with the concept of glory and I wonder if changing that one word might be worth considering.

“May those I love the most still stand apart. “

On that one I think it might be worth thinking about rewording the thought to clarify the meaning.