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Lynn Martin

I love that this text goes through all the things that we value, even very legitimately, and puts them in proper perspective.

A few notes:

“That I may love more truly than before!” is a bit ambiguous. I assume what’s meant is “That I may love them more truly than I did before”–which of course doesn’t fit the rhythm. But if it could be clearer that placing all loves beneath the love of Christ is actually heightening and sanctifying those loves, that would be nice.

Rhythm is a bit wonky in this line: “The joy of knowing Him whom I long for!” Especially since it’s the final line in the text, it should have a rhyming syllable that is naturally accented.

I’ve always found pentameter hard to write music to. But this text flows well enough naturally that I’m sure there are tunes out there that would work.